Here is a link to my draft. I got it in late, but if anyone could review it, that would help. I have no real things I'm looking for, so just tell if if it works. Thank you.
Good job with your essay! Your first draft is looking really good! I really like your essay topic! Also, your thesis statement is clear and concise. But I think you should work on your conclusion paragraph. It was a bit short and could use some more sentences.
Good job with your essay! Your first draft is looking really good! I really like your essay topic! Also, your thesis statement is clear and concise. But I think you should work on your conclusion paragraph. It was a bit short and could use some more sentences.
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